Help Raythe Make A Monster!

The Elven King’s Blade is a gay high fantasy romance serial.

Raythe says,

For those of you who don’t know yet, Elven King’s Blade is a gay romance set both in our modern world and in a high fantasy world with elves, dragons, Black Riders, Storm Maidens and more creepy and beautiful creations that I’ve put together.  But I thought it would be fun if you guys had a chance to actually CREATE one of these monsters for the story and Mathia Arkoniel will draw it for us!

So here’s how I think it would be best to do this, in the comments I want you to tell me about a creature you think would be cool to have in the story.  In your comment, include the following (if applicable):

(1) What does it look like? Fangs, claws, wings, slithers, humanoid, etc.

(2) What special powers does it have? Spits fire, poisonous, magical, etc.

(3) What is it immune against? Cold, fire, blades, etc.

(4) What is its weakness? Element, blade, bow, etc.

(5) What’s its backstory?  For example, the Storm Maidens are thought to be murdered young women brought back to a semi-life to seek revenge.

If we have a ton of entries, we’ll do a poll for our favorites. I might even try to incorporate ALL of them, but Mathia will only illustrate a couple.

So help me make some cool high fantasy monsters!

66 Responses to Help Raythe Make A Monster!

  1. TALENTLYCHALLENGED May 13, 2018 at 7:45 pm #

    This might not be a good suggestion, but to me the scariest thing is the unknown. Whenever I have nightmarws, it’s not the monsters I can see that scare me, it’s the ones I CAN’T. The monsters I have no knowledge of are the worst. At least if I can see them, smell them, I know what I’m dealing with. But if all I can do is FEEL them, then my mind makes it even more terrifying, trying to come up with or figure out exactly WHAT the monster is. I know it’s a bit of a vague answer, but hopefully it helps, even of just a little. Thanks for all you and your team do for us! 😄

    • Raythe May 13, 2018 at 7:53 pm #

      It’s actually a really GOOD suggestion, because it means a monster that comes upon you in pitch blackness and all you do is FEEL it. You have no idea what it is …

      I’m thinking something like a Shade as a name …

      My mind is already working! Keep the ideas coming!

    • Remi May 13, 2018 at 10:17 pm #

      Apologies in advance for my nerdiness, but this actually reminds me of the Doctor Who monster called The Silence, when you see them they make you forget what you saw or did so you don’t know what they look like, or what they want, but you know that something is out there…

      • Raythe May 13, 2018 at 10:31 pm #

        I love your nerdiness. I join your nerdiness!

        Doctor Who has a history of great monsters. Just things that you wouldn’t think would be scary are. I actually had bad dreams about the Cyber Men and the Daleks make the skin between my shoulder blades squirm!

        • Jack May 14, 2018 at 3:57 am #

          Are the silence those creepy statue monsters that move when you look away? I hated those things! I have never looked at statues the same!

          • Natasha Barlow May 14, 2018 at 6:17 pm #

            those are the weeping angels the silent assassins who kill you gently by sending you back in time just far enough so that you die on the day you first meet them. The silence are similar to slenderman in looks but not as lanky

    • Keil May 13, 2018 at 11:17 pm #

      Once upon a time I was the best, renowned for strength and wits. I was cruel in my power. If you didn’t meet my standards you were nothing, less than nothing. I would kill those found unworthy. Devour their souls and take their power. Why wouldn’t I? I was the best. I had the world at me feet.
      And them I met him. His eyes were so green. So determined. So fierce… So kind.
      “Be my partner.” He said. “Be my friend and you will never be alone.” He cared not that I was cruel. He cared not for those I had destroyed. It was in the past, he said. No more. I could start fresh. A new beginning.
      I hadn’t realized I was lonely. That all I’d wanted was someone to call my own. What is the use of all this power if I had no one to share it with? No one to tell my tales? To call my own?
      I didn’t make it easy. I loved and hated him with equal passion. I fought and clawed against the gentle hold his feelings placed on me… until one day I didn’t. I was so confused. Then he smiled, his black hair gleaming in the light of our campfire, the moon high overhead. “There’s no need to fight.” He said. And he was right. Because he belonged to me and I to him.
      We traveled and had adventures. We were friends. And as the years came and went we became legends. He tempered my cruelty. I protected his innocent heart. We were partners. We were friends. We were the best.
      And then he was gone.
      I was lost. Broken. Where was my beautiful green-eyed warrior? My friend? I searched for him. For years I searched. Why was he gone? Didn’t he say I would never be alone? Slowly I reverted to the monster I had been. I fell back on old habits. He wasn’t there to disapprove and even if he had been I would still do it. He had left me! Why should I care for his distain!
      It was centuries before I learned the truth. The Undriel’s had passed down an ultimatum. Join them as Blades or be exiled. My loving companion hadn’t left me. He’d been torn from me! Exiled to a place called earth.
      I tried to get to this foreign land. This planet said to be devoid of magic. Even when I felt our bond snap… and I new my beloved was no more. I didn’t believe it. I fell into denial. He wouldn’t leave me alone! Never alone! Not again…
      And then I found a gateway. Created by Storm Maidens and broken children. I was on earth. I would find him… or what was left with him. And we would be united once again. I wouldn’t have to be alone.
      I threw myself into our broken bond, trying to mend the torn edges… and then I felt it. I felt him… no not him. A piece of him? I ran through trees much smaller than I was used to. The very air, so lacking in magic, tearing through my lungs. My legs felt leaden. My heart like it was about to burst. But I ran on. He was close. He as worth the pain. To have my warrior back I would do anything!
      The trees grew larger. The sunlight taking on an enchanting glow. Magic rippled through the air… And there he was! My warrior! My beloved. There I patch of sunlight, beneath a giant tree, my beloved lounged. A feast was at his feet and a blond whores lips on his own. Their bodies pressed together.
      I saw red. My magic built. I would kill the whore who dared touch what was mine. And then I would remind my blade why he belonged to me. Why I belonged to him.
      Then their lips parted, and my heart stopped. This was not my beloved. The lips were close. The strong jaw and raven black hair. Those same eyes… And the kindness in those emerald depths. A descendant maybe? A kindred spirit? A reincarnated soul? I pulled at the bond again sure I was wrong… but I was not. This man was the last link to my beloved. I watched as he reached up, his hand cording though the nearly white hair of the limpet who clung to him and felt my world shake again. The one holding on to my beloved was one of the violet-eyed Undriel.
      My blood ran cold. My resolve hardened. Finally, I had found him…Or what was left of him. He was meant for me! And here the Undriel was again, trying to steal what was mine. To take him away!
      A cruel smile took over my lips. My claws dug into the dirt, crushing leaves and twigs beneath my hand. It was no matter. I would free my beloved from the Undriel. I would have my beloved at my side once more… And I would never be alone again.

      Hey! So my idea of a monster is probably a bit loser than most of the other entries because he can be good. He’s cruel because he is lost, not because it is all he can feel. My ‘monster’, was once the familiar of a blade, maybe even a violine? But when the Blades were exiled to earth his bond was strained then broken. He was the strongest familiar of the strongest blade… and then he was nothing. All he wants is to be whole again. And he will do ANYTHING to make that happen.

      1. What’s he look like?
      Adorable. Most violine are aren’t they? But a mix between violine and human. His warrior wanted a friend and so he changed to meet his green-eyed warriors needs. Like opposable thumbs, golden eyes, and a human-like body. He kept his tail though. It was to precious to give up.
      2. Special powers?
      He is magic! He channels and remines his own in order to make his partner stronger. He also has his own claws, strength, and speed to bolster his attacks.
      3. Immunity?
      Most magic and elements. He can take a lickin’ and keep on tickin’.
      4. Weakness?
      The broken bond between him and his former blade has weakned him. His emotions are reckless and all over the place… and he is lonely. So very alone.
      5. Backstory?
      Once there was a young blade. He meet a cruel and powerful familiar. They fought and became friends. One day the boy kissed him and they became more. Then the boy was taken from the violine… From the story above I’m sure you can fill in the rest! 😊

      • Keil May 13, 2018 at 11:25 pm #

        Oops! Just realized I posted in the wrong place for my first post…. About your post I agree. My imagination can sometimes scare me more than any real threat. I like the idea of something that can be felt but not seen! 🙂

      • Raythe May 13, 2018 at 11:49 pm #

        I absolutely LOVE THIS! Really, really brilliant. You had me reading breathlessly to find out what would happen. I have to work this in somehow. Twig would be the one to sort of explain what’s happening, stopping this other violine from being killed … OH MAN! Thank you so much for sharing this.

        So brilliant!!!!

        • Keil May 14, 2018 at 12:30 am #

          I’m so glad you like it! Some of my favorite characters in any story are ones that you can’t decide if you love or hate or even more the ones that you hate that you love. I can’t wait to see how you work him in!

          … As a side note I kind of went a little further in my head. Once feathers are done being smoothed out Hiska (What I called him in my head but feel free to change!) would lose his purpose. He’d want to protect and nuture Ciaran but he couldn’t be his familiar because of Twig and he can’t get revenge on the Uridels without hurting Ciaran. He’d still be alone. I kind of liked the idea of him ending up aggressively pursuing Ciaran’s dad. Kind of like he fell for the emotionally constipated yet very protective father of his new ‘beloved.’ After butting heads multiple times about how to ‘properly’ take care of Ciaran of course. 🙂

          Plus the idea of him trying to avoid Hiska’s amorous tail/s is hilarious to me. 😉

        • Keil May 14, 2018 at 4:59 am #

          Couldn’t help myself… must plant the seed!

          “Such fire in your eyes…” Tail twitching Hiska darted forward, his hand cupping Egan’s cheek. His golden eyes narrowed, his claws digging in. Gliding his hand down Egan’s jaw, Hiska watched as blood seeped around the shallow groves he had created. “I haven’t decided yet if I want fan those flames or smother them.”
          Stepping back Hiska licked the blood on his hand, humming in surprise at the flavor. Much sweeter than he had expected. Mores the pity. Egan’s emotional distance from Ciaran was hurting him… and that just wasn’t going to work.
          Egan’s jaw clenched, a single drop of crimson falling to the floor to stain the floor. Hiska watched it fall, disquieted for a moment by how much it bothered him. Maybe because it would make Ciaran angry?
          “He’s my son.” Egan said, bringing Hiska’s attention back to him. “And I will be the one to protect him.”
          “We will see.” Hiska grinned, feeling his predatory instincts rise. This human was turning out to be much more entertaining then he had expected. Maybe he could keep him around a bit longer… for entertainment purposes. “We will see.”

        • Keil May 14, 2018 at 5:43 am #

          All the seeds…

          Egan sat down gingerly, a small groan slipping from his lips. Ciaran looked him over, his forehead wrinkled in concern. Hiska smirked into his coffee. Even from across the room where he leaned against the counter it was easy to see the numerous scratches and shallow punctures littering Egan’s arms and neck before disappearing beneath his shirt.
          It had been an amazing night. The sweet noises he had made… the way he reluctantly followed every command. Perfection.
          “My pretty pincushion.” Hiska crooned, his tail twitching in pleasure. Ciaran’s eyes widened, obviously seeing the marks on his father’s skin in a new light. Egan glared at Hiska as a flush spread along Ciaran’s cheeks. Hiska felt his smirk turn into a full-blown smile. Small pink lips pulling up over sharp canines. Egan sighed.
          “Just sit down already.” He said, the resignation in his voice clear. Hiska pranced forward and took the chair next to him, wrapping his tail around Egan’s ankle before taking a bite of a fluffy bit of egg. He’d had a few more bites when Egan placed one of his bacon slices on Hiska’s plate.
          Picking up the bacon, Hiska bit into it. Humming in enjoyment at the salty flavor. This was a good morning he decided. Tightening his tail around Egan’s ankle he took another bite. A wonderful morning.

      • Natasha Barlow May 14, 2018 at 6:46 pm #

        your idea is awesome. even i was getting really into that story you were writing XD

        • Keil May 14, 2018 at 7:26 pm #

          Thank you Natasha! I really hope he makes an appearance in the story. 🙂

  2. TaurusMagus May 13, 2018 at 8:03 pm #

    Have you considered looking at World of War Crafts Lore? They have some cool looking monsters. I also suggest looking up Secret World Legends monsters as well. However a cool monster for this story would be: Perhaps a fusion. A lion body filled with reptile skin, three long scorpion tails, three eyes that glow and blast out beams that turn victims to stone, its poison that it spits or ejects from the tails are like a corosive acid that reduces victims into goo. Its size is that of an average car. It would be immune against elemental magic, as it can also telepathically attack and the cretaure finds its victims by opening its third eye on top of its forehead that looks at the world in energy form finding the victims aura/life force. Immune to the four elements its weakness could therefore be magic from light or shadow. It moves around like a twisted version of a fusion between panther and lion but reptillian skin, three eyes saber tooth tiger fings, its roar can even change the weather to its suitable conditions. It was once an ancient gaurdian that gaurded a tomb of a sorceress that tried to find a way to become immortal. This beast was created by fusing a monster from some panteon[up to you to name] and forging that essence into the body of a panther and while this occured a starving lion lunged to attack the infected panther during ritual causing the creatures to become one. I havent read your story yet but perhaps also a cool monster to fight could be a lich? Or perhaps wraith that sucks the life essence of innocent people?Keep looking up ancient mythological monsters I hope you figure out some really cool ideas best of luck!

    • Raythe May 13, 2018 at 8:10 pm #

      Have you considered looking at World of War Crafts Lore? They have some cool looking monsters. I also suggest looking up Secret World Legends monsters as well.

      I’m sure they do! But that is THEIR intellectual property so we can’t take from them. That would be stealing. Besides, I’m not out of ideas, I just want to hear YOURS.

      And I should add that yours are really cool!

  3. elementalelf May 13, 2018 at 8:38 pm #

    I agree with TalentlyChallenged! Things you can’t see to fight. As a bonus, if Ciaran has Light Magic, that would probably kill it. Also, nightmares.

    Others: things that are already dead, or things that possess you, and spiders. Oh, I really hate-fear spiders. The worst monster I could imagine would look like a huge spider, and would be able to break itself into a million little spiders to chase you. Okay. Gonna get a flamethrower, just in case.

    If we’re going with the theme of “myths that are real”: Here in North America, we have the Wendigo, a spirit of cold and hunger that possesses you and makes you into a cannibal. Possession is a tricky subject: do you save the possessed one? How do you kill the thing that’s actually doing the possessing?

    For the coolness: “Futakuchi-onna,” who has a second mouth on the back of her head, hidden by her hair. Her hair is mobile and will seek around to feed the second mouth. She goes after greedy people! I imagine that kindness is her bane; if you offer her food or kidness, maybe that tames her vengance.

    • Raythe May 13, 2018 at 9:00 pm #

      The idea of using Light Magic against something in darkness is great as it is practical and logical.

      Spiders … oh, man, don’t get me started on my fear of those! Bees though really freak me out. Maybe some kind of swarm …

      Wendigos are terrifying to be sure. Use that though in Ghost Half.

      Some of the Japanese monsters are just so horrifying as much as scary and that would qualify as one of those!

      • elementalelf May 13, 2018 at 9:23 pm #

        Oh shoot, Ghost Half, yes. It’s the thing about being made to do something horrifying against your will, and that seems like a Riven thing. Like, how are those townspeople going to feel when they realize they’ve been tacitly assisting in the deaths of children?

        But I’m also interested in things that look or seem terrible, but are actually good and kind. Or, that their “bad side” is just for evildoers. Huh, maybe that’s why I love your writing! I’d love to see a Riven “monster” that might actually help Ciaran, or decide to defect to Ciaran’s side, if our heroes can see that’s its being compelled or misunderstood…

        • Raythe May 13, 2018 at 10:34 pm #

          Something against their will … yes, that sounds like it so much.

          The Riven are not all bad for sure. They have a very almost martial society and they are very good normally to one another to a certain extent. But I think they are ruled by various Mage Lords. This is giving me more ideas about them.

  4. Oz May 13, 2018 at 8:54 pm #

    Apologies in advance for the wall of text…

    I’ve had this idea bouncing around for a while with no place to play with it: blood elemental.

    When dark sorcery involves sacrifices, you typically end up with a lot of blood. From the scarlet lifeblood spilled to fuel dark magic come the blood elementals. Rogue creatures, they follow no master. Instead, they exist to spill the blood of others as theirs was.

    Their native form is, quite literally, a mobile, sentient pool of blood. It can seep through cracks, slither along the ground, even magick itself up vertical surfaces to reach prey. They assume a humanoid form to commit their crimes against the living, a faceless and genderless biped, solid and black like old, hardened blood. Their arms, however, from the elbows down are two blades of the dripping fresh crimson blood they take the form of normally.

    They are immune to mundane physical weapons. The biped form they assume can be broken apart, but it won’t destroy the being. The elements can slow them down, but again can not destroy them. Magical weapons striking the physical form will shatter it and dispel the dark sorcery giving it life. Similarly, any spell that can be considered “good” or “pure” or “light” will achieve the same effect. Interestingly, they are not completely immune from humans. A human who sacrifices themselves to protect another life will disrupt the nature of the creature, directly countering its very creation.

    That’s my idea. I admit, I’m not the best at resistances and weaknesses. They all seem cliche in one way or another. Feel free to take creative license with it, in the event you’d like to use it.

    • Raythe May 13, 2018 at 9:02 pm #

      I absolutely LOVE the idea of a Blood Elemental and I think it would really work with the Riven!

      It totally is terrifying and goes along with what we’re seeing about how their magic twists things! So good!

  5. Keith May 13, 2018 at 9:20 pm #

    I can’t really think of any good idea of monster, but still commenting to say WOAH THE ART IS GORGEOUS!!!! *w*

    • Raythe May 13, 2018 at 10:34 pm #

      There’s more to come! It really is phenomenal.

  6. Shelle May 13, 2018 at 10:16 pm #

    long matted hair with black eyes and long sharp fangs and nails.

    • Raythe May 13, 2018 at 10:35 pm #

      Matted hair really freaks me out somehow … really really does. I can imagine things MOVING in it! AIIIIEEEEEEE!

  7. Taru May 13, 2018 at 10:24 pm #

    What about a monster that becomes your greatest fear? Obviusly his power is the magic and illusions.
    It could be inmune to the magic and to the blade, so maybe is weakness could be something tricky, like a special metal or something like this.

    • Raythe May 13, 2018 at 10:35 pm #

      Sort of like a Dementor! Something that has the power of illusion. Has many possibilities!

      • Taru May 13, 2018 at 11:51 pm #

        Yeah! It was not in my mind when I described it, but you’re right!

  8. Keil May 13, 2018 at 11:23 pm #

    Once upon a time I was the best, renowned for strength and wits. I was cruel in my power. If you didn’t meet my standards you were nothing, less than nothing. I would kill those found unworthy. Devour their souls and take their power. Why wouldn’t I? I was the best. I had the world at me feet.
    And them I met him. His eyes were so green. So determined. So fierce… So kind.
    “Be my partner.” He said. “Be my friend and you will never be alone.” He cared not that I was cruel. He cared not for those I had destroyed. It was in the past, he said. No more. I could start fresh. A new beginning.
    I hadn’t realized I was lonely. That all I’d wanted was someone to call my own. What is the use of all this power if I had no one to share it with? No one to tell my tales? To call my own?
    I didn’t make it easy. I loved and hated him with equal passion. I fought and clawed against the gentle hold his feelings placed on me… until one day I didn’t. I was so confused. Then he smiled, his black hair gleaming in the light of our campfire, the moon high overhead. “There’s no need to fight.” He said. And he was right. Because he belonged to me and I to him.
    We traveled and had adventures. We were friends. And as the years came and went we became legends. He tempered my cruelty. I protected his innocent heart. We were partners. We were friends. We were the best.
    And then he was gone.
    I was lost. Broken. Where was my beautiful green-eyed warrior? My friend? I searched for him. For years I searched. Why was he gone? Didn’t he say I would never be alone? Slowly I reverted to the monster I had been. I fell back on old habits. He wasn’t there to disapprove and even if he had been I would still do it. He had left me! Why should I care for his distain!
    It was centuries before I learned the truth. The Undriel’s had passed down an ultimatum. Join them as Blades or be exiled. My loving companion hadn’t left me. He’d been torn from me! Exiled to a place called earth.
    I tried to get to this foreign land. This planet said to be devoid of magic. Even when I felt our bond snap… and I new my beloved was no more. I didn’t believe it. I fell into denial. He wouldn’t leave me alone! Never alone! Not again…
    And then I found a gateway. Created by Storm Maidens and broken children. I was on earth. I would find him… or what was left with him. And we would be united once again. I wouldn’t have to be alone.
    I threw myself into our broken bond, trying to mend the torn edges… and then I felt it. I felt him… no not him. A piece of him? I ran through trees much smaller than I was used to. The very air, so lacking in magic, tearing through my lungs. My legs felt leaden. My heart like it was about to burst. But I ran on. He was close. He as worth the pain. To have my warrior back I would do anything!
    The trees grew larger. The sunlight taking on an enchanting glow. Magic rippled through the air… And there he was! My warrior! My beloved. There I patch of sunlight, beneath a giant tree, my beloved lounged. A feast was at his feet and a blond whores lips on his own. Their bodies pressed together.
    I saw red. My magic built. I would kill the whore who dared touch what was mine. And then I would remind my blade why he belonged to me. Why I belonged to him.
    Then their lips parted, and my heart stopped. This was not my beloved. The lips were close. The strong jaw and raven black hair. Those same eyes… And the kindness in those emerald depths. A descendant maybe? A kindred spirit? A reincarnated soul? I pulled at the bond again sure I was wrong… but I was not. This man was the last link to my beloved. I watched as he reached up, his hand cording though the nearly white hair of the limpet who clung to him and felt my world shake again. The one holding on to my beloved was one of the violet-eyed Undriel.
    My blood ran cold. My resolve hardened. Finally, I had found him…Or what was left of him. He was meant for me! And here the Undriel was again, trying to steal what was mine. To take him away!
    A cruel smile took over my lips. My claws dug into the dirt, crushing leaves and twigs beneath my hand. It was no matter. I would free my beloved from the Undriel. I would have my beloved at my side once more… And I would never be alone again.

    Hey! So my idea of a monster is probably a bit loser than most of the other entries because he can be good. He’s cruel because he is lost, not because it is all he can feel. My ‘monster’, was once the familiar of a blade, maybe even a violine? But when the Blades were exiled to earth his bond was strained then broken. He was the strongest familiar of the strongest blade… and then he was nothing. All he wants is to be whole again. And he will do ANYTHING to make that happen.

    1. What’s he look like?
    Adorable. Most violine are aren’t they? But a mix between violine and human. His warrior wanted a friend and so he changed to meet his green-eyed warriors needs. Like opposable thumbs, golden eyes, and a human-like body. He kept his tail though. It was to precious to give up.
    2. Special powers?
    He is magic! He channels and remines his own in order to make his partner stronger. He also has his own claws, strength, and speed to bolster his attacks.
    3. Immunity?
    Most magic and elements. He can take a lickin’ and keep on tickin’.
    4. Weakness?
    The broken bond between him and his former blade has weakned him. His emotions are reckless and all over the place… and he is lonely. So very alone.
    5. Backstory?
    Once there was a young blade. He meet a cruel and powerful familiar. They fought and became friends. One day the boy kissed him and they became more. Then the boy was taken from the violine… From the story above I’m sure you can fill in the rest! 😊

    • Raythe May 13, 2018 at 11:51 pm #

      See above. So freaking awesome!

      • Keil May 14, 2018 at 12:03 am #

        Thank you! 😀

  9. HuntressZ May 13, 2018 at 11:26 pm #

    I had this idea of a creature made up of different colored hues of pure life. When I say this I mean like their body is made of a cascade of colors. I thought of such a creature looking humanoid, and that said creatures are actually tormented souls that belonged to the pure or innocent, but at the moment of their death the soul is stolen from their body and slowly goes mad thereafter. For this reason I thought that it’s main ability could be to steal the essence of others as a reprieve from their pain of being disembodied. Since it is made of pure light I imagined it being somewhat weaker at night, amongst the shadows. Since it operates mainly in the day it can make itself invisible for brief moments of time.

    • Raythe May 13, 2018 at 11:51 pm #

      You guys are being so very creative! And I love how you are considering the story itself for the type of monster. Seriously awesome.

  10. Topaz111111 May 14, 2018 at 2:50 am #

    How about monsters that travel in packs? But are super tiny. They stand at 5-7 inches max. The females being bigger because, why not? The young are born covered in grey fur so soft and fluffy, no wings, and bodies similar baby mice- and beady and sparkling eyes! They are born eyes only to have them ripped out by the older ones and the paste made from the ripped eyes is what seals the gaping holes shut. The reason for plucking their eyes is so that other senses are focused on, and because they’re like insects, light draws them in and the young are killed for their softer-than-cotton fur. The older young, lose their fur in fights among themselves and what’s left behind id’s their tough leathery skin covered in hardened scabs. The older ones, having no eyes, they instead either fly on wings about 5-7 inches long each wing, that depend on how big the creature gets. Or they crawl/scurry/run if they lost their wings in early adolescence. They only come out night because there are more shadows they can hide in because they know it’ll be easier to attack unsuspecting victims who don’t know how fend for themselves of they cannot see clearly where the monster is. They are immune to all magics except telepathy, but that’s super hard to do when you are fighting dozens if not hundreds of these little freaks.
    Their bites are sharp, with snouts that grow long after they’re born, but it takes many to cause any real damage unless the victim is alone and trapped. Their bites feel like getting a shot when they strike fast, except when they get a good mouthful, then they can pull off quite a bit.
    They make their homes under fallen trees in dens. The males taking care of them- but not doing well because they obviously get into fights and lose their cute fur in their fights.
    The females are the main food providers, but all can fight if any them call using a terrifying and deadly shriek which can cause either slight discomfort to partial balance problems due the piercing shriek hitting the victim’s ears.
    These creatures were created cute, but due hunting, they evolved into the flying/running group predators they grow up into.

  11. Raythe May 14, 2018 at 3:19 am #

    OMG! This is gruesome, awesome and detailed! This actually really terrifies me because I can see how this would be so scary to have a pack of these things after you. One might not be scary but a whole pack of them? OMG! YIKES! Absolutely brilliant!

    • Jack May 14, 2018 at 4:17 am #

      This monster idea reminds me of the Doctor Who episode where we first meet River. There are these bugs that live in the Great Library because their forest was cut down to make the paper for the books. It was a wonderfully creepy episode. The bugs ate the flesh of humans, but lived in the shadows. They really creeped me out because you couldn’t see them and yet you knew they were there. Just talenlychallenge’s comment about the scariest things being the ones you can’t see, only feel.

      • Topaz111111 May 15, 2018 at 8:02 am #

        Actually, I was thinking of the little carnivorous dinosaurs from Jurassic Park 2, the would hunt in large groups.
        Making them cute when they’re first born was just my way of starting out how some random traveller might have stumbled into clutches. Also maybe slightly thinking about baby budgies & puppies and how they are fuzzy and fluffy when budgies are getting their first feathers. But what happens if they were in constant battle?
        The scars would into calluses and harden the leathery bodies. I only thought building scars because of these nasty ones I’ve got from an accident last month & the doc said the bruises are just from not enough exercise & getting the muscles to break down the bruises.
        Also, it’s not that you can’t see them it’s just you’re too busy defending yourself that you don’t think about turning on the lights. Plus, only the babies with would for the light trick, not adults in the middle of a hunt.

  12. Kris May 14, 2018 at 3:40 am #

    Frankenstein’s Monster. Only worse.

    A Riven elf that’s had human body parts grafted onto it to the point that it’s more dead human flesh animated by necromantic magic than living elven flesh. Created by the big bad of the story and quite literally inspired from reading Mary Shelley’s novel. If there’s any conscious thought left in an entity like that then it’s gone completely insane from pain and horror of its own existence.

    An antithesis to Ciaran’s ability and quite possibly the worst thing Aeth has ever heard or seen of Riven magic.

    This just makes the banishment of the Riven elves to Earth all that more of a damning decision because it’s clear that at least one of them has gone completely batty and is torturing and killing humans on top of torturing another Riven elf (if it wasn’t already dead) and turning into a necromantic abomination. The thing doesn’t sleep or eat. It doesn’t stop. It has to be completely burned to asked and the bones ground to dust to actually finally kill it because it’s got so much necromancy in it the BONES WILL JUST GET UP.

    Bonus points if it’s Ciaran’s ancestor.

    Just the psychological horror of having something coming after you without reprieve. The idea that you have to kill it over and over again after realizing you can’t save it. That it was once, or may still even be a thinking, feeling Riven trapped within would be extra brutal for Aeth and Ciaran because those two are really empathetic individuals.

    • Raythe May 14, 2018 at 3:45 am #

      You guys are awesome! When I saw monsters and scary you deliver with gruesome back stories and a sense of impending doom!

      • Kris May 14, 2018 at 4:01 am #

        My husband loves making monsters. He doesn’t read the stories but I told him think undead things and he gave me this:

        The Grave-crawler. Creature created from Necromantic leftovers; failed attempts to raise full beings. Mostly skeletal, held together by a binding of sinew and dried skin, something akin to a Naga. Four arms, claws replaced with flesh-stripping talons crafted from sharpened bone, lower jaw split apart and made into something akin to mandibles. From the “waist” up, it’s assembled from mostly humanoid components, if larger than normal for a human or Elf, but below that it’s something like a serpentine mummy, wrapped in a mixture of desiccated tissue and cloth wraps, with several spinal columns wound together and fused into a snake-like tail, with ribs affixed to act much like those of a snake for locomotion. Some variants may be seen with a Cobra-like hood of dead flesh. Often identified by a rustling/rattling sound as it moves, and by the haunting blue glow of its hollow eye sockets.

        Special Powers: It’s exceptionally swift, capable of locomotion far faster than normal human walking speed. It can also constrict prey with its coils, though the worst injury comes from piercing damage thanks to wear-sharpened rib bones cutting into the victim. It is constantly accompanied by swarms of vermin that are drawn to its dead flesh, as well as to the necromantic energy coming off of it; it can command the vermin to some small degree thanks to its low cunning, to swarm prey, either as a diversion or an attack thanks to their biting and stinging.

        Immunity and Weaknesses: Due to its lack of normal organs or living tissue it’s immune to the cold, and blades mostly slip between hollows in the body. It is, however, extremely vulnerable to flame due to the dried state of its flesh, and blunt weapons can easily shatter its bones if brought into play with full force. It can also be soothed and lulled into a nearly hypnotized state with dazzling lights or music; it’s not terribly intelligent, acting instead on instinct, and such things can readily bewilder it. It’s possible that some small part of the conglomerate dead that make up the creature remains, which could also explain why it can be calmed.

        • Raythe May 14, 2018 at 4:02 pm #

          Nice!!! This is incredibly creepy and I can totally see these guys on old battle grounds where the Riven and Valore warred long ago.

      • Keil May 14, 2018 at 7:13 pm #

        “No.” Hiska trembled in horror. The creature before him was a terrible sight to behold. A mishmash of broken pieces and flesh, sewn together by magic and evil. The hand of a human child fingers crusted with dirt, the shapely leg of a young woman, the brawny torso of a man… and those beautiful green eyes.
        “My warrior…” A tear rolled down his cheek as he looked into those familiar vacant eyes. “What have they done to you?”

        … Even if none of this stuff gets put in the story I’m enjoying the heck out of making all these scenarios 🙂 Thank you Rathe for making such a fun blog!

        And great post! I can totally see the monster and imagine the horror Cirian and Aeth would feel, and the guilt that would come from knowing that maybe if the Riven hadn’t been banished this tragedy might not have ever occurred. Wouldn’t it be twisted if the Riven that created the Frankenstein was trying to piece back together a friend or mentor? Maybe he was too young to understand why he was banished to earth. Another Riven took him under his wing, protected him in this new and dangerous world. Then died to protect him/her. They made the Frankenstein so they could have their protector back. And underneath it all their rage and hatred for the Urindels grow.

  13. camcc0501 May 14, 2018 at 6:46 am #

    Now here is what I would like to know. Do you need good or bad monsters? Oh well, I’ll give you some of each.

    Let’s start with Bad Monsters:

    Blod of Decay: Have you ever seen the anime “Epic”. Where the girl is turned into the fairy by the queen of the fairies. You know when the bad guys shoot an arrow and the vegetation starts to bubble up and rot. Now image that moving around rotting everything in it path. What ever it touches just starts to slowly rot. All it wants to do is eat life so it hunts for the most life force it can find. It’s weakness would be cold. Freezing it would be a way to stop it. It would look like a moldy black and gross anything. If the blod part throws you why not make it a construct that the Riven Elves have made like a golem. Instead of stone or metal make it of rotting flesh.

    The Creeper: Shadow critter. Hides in shadows of people and slowly drains the life force out of them. The only way you know their there is if the shadow opens its eyes while your watching it. Otherwise they look like a normal shadow. They travel though shadows hooping from one to another to get to their prey. They do need their eyes to see where they are going. Ones they are attached to their prey they don’t need to open their eyes that often. Attachment is like a symbiosis. Light spells can kill it. I thought the Riven could use them as massagers or assassins. They would summons them from the plane of Shadow. If you have seen the anime “The Ancient Mage’s Bride” how the great mage hides is what I’m thinking of.

    Neutral Monsters:

    I need to see a Dryad. Now is some myths they are evil, but I think they could be neutral. They would be great forest protectors.

    Good Monsters:

    Ents: Who doesn’t love a walking talking tree or two?

    Griffens: Would be great. The Elven Air Force.

    So there is my two cents and two Anime everyone needs to watch. I hope this helps.

    • camcc0501 May 14, 2018 at 6:52 am #

      P.S. I love the new pic at the top. It is really Drool writhe.

    • Raythe May 14, 2018 at 4:04 pm #

      I can totally picture a lot of this. Your idea especially neutral beings is a way to flesh out all of the world. I am going to keep this all in mind. And the image of rot spreading from a simple touch is just creepy and brilliant!

  14. Jediguy May 14, 2018 at 8:00 am #

    I offer you my fears and a big phobia based on my imagination for your reference. My 3 top fears in order from first to third are spiders, mold(old food), and sinkholes. My phobia is an booeyman made out of my random fear over nothing.

    I have generic fear of spiders passed to myself from my mother. I find them really creepy. I can’t stand anything that have more than 6 legs. About mold(old food), I often imagine that it comes alive with that gross greenish “hair” and move around every time I see a mold in small or super big sizes. Since I have a fear of heights, sinkholes scare me for real. Who know if I walk or sit on a sinkhole without a warning? I find it very scary.

    About my phobia on booeyman, I often go bed with all of the doors around me closed. Especially closets. I don’t know why but if I see a closet being open while dark, I imagine that a giant black hand come out of the closet and grabs me away from my bed for good. However, you could use it as black magic. I do believe that feelings are magic themselves. Both positive and negative. I think that you could use it to apply on Talentedchallenged’s idea. When I read it, i imagine that an invisible creature that manifest a physical body once someone emits more negative feelings than usual. They are dark magic that feeds on negative feelings and use their fears to power themselves up. When they have power, all of them are not same since they are based on specific fears. They can be vanished through white magic like healing or clean water. I use my experiences, Harry Potter stories and Talentedchallenged’s idea to make this creature. There you go.

    • Raythe May 14, 2018 at 4:10 pm #

      The sink holes part of this has completely gotten me intrigued (the rest is completely understandable and good) but this is really unique! Now I’m going to be considering all of this!

  15. Jediguy May 14, 2018 at 8:05 am #

    Oh yea. I just thought that they may have beautiful appearances but inside, they are dead like mold. That’s why they prefer to be invisible. Just a thought.

    • Raythe May 14, 2018 at 4:10 pm #

      That would be brilliant. Like normal looking people, but they aren’t!

  16. Kaitlin Young May 14, 2018 at 12:54 pm #

    You could make something like the Elf Eater from D&D. It looks like a giant, headless elephant with a huge mouth on each side of its body just below its protective shell. Tentacles sprout from around the shell and each of them has a mouth. It waits in the Abyss waiting for Malar the God of Beasts and one of the oldest enemy of elves to call him to the surface. More info here: http://forgottenrealms.wikia.com/wiki/Ityak-Ortheel.
    While you couldn’t make it exact (I doubt Wizards of the Coast would be okay with that) I hope it can inspire you to make a really awesome baddie. Good luck.

    • Raythe May 14, 2018 at 4:11 pm #

      thanks! Anything that eat Elves would be terrifying to Elves! Very good lol!

  17. Ipodpixie May 14, 2018 at 3:09 pm #

    My idea would be along the lines of a siren/evil mermaid. Known as a silver darling, it would obviously be a water elemental found in pools of undisturbed water and would assume a humanoid shape with shining silver scales on their lower halves. Though actually genderless it would take on the shape most pleasing to the eye of the beholder. So one person would see a fit, handsome man while another person could see a svelte, beautiful woman at the same time. It has the ability to lure the person to their death in a watery grave where the victim becomes a meal. If attacked their true form is revealed, depthless white eyes, grey/greenish skin that drips with mucus. A maw full of sharp teeth and claws that contain a venom that incapacitates its victim. Long matted hair that writes like snakes and a shrivelled body finish it off. It has the ability to control water being an elemental – it can turn into a pool of water or mist to avoid an attack but can call on the water itself to drag an unwilling victim in. Impervious to blades, fire and magical attack your only hope is ice to fight off this creature. Once frozen remove it’s head and the evil spirit dissipates.

    Long winded explanation finished! Also wanted to say love the new banner. That is how imagined the Elven king to look.

    • Ipodpixie May 14, 2018 at 3:13 pm #

      Bloody auto correct – should be writhes like snakes. How in the hell would a snake write????

    • Raythe May 14, 2018 at 4:12 pm #

      Oooooooh! We have a water based creature! I love it! So very cool.

  18. Vera_lemur May 15, 2018 at 2:57 am #

    What looks like an old woodland hermit has been guided into the surrounding forests of Forest Falls. He is brown and gray and black with skin that should look like leather if he were human but it looks like bark because he is not. His hair isn’t actually hair because it’s grayed and half dying heather. He sometimes seems to seep black tar from the deeper crags in his skin and his footprints are only obvious because the grass grows a bit taller where he steps. When unmoving in the woods he can blend in startlingly well. He looks like a boulder sometimes, or a moss covered stump. He can lean against a large tree and look like part of the trunk. He speaks only in the language of nature, audible only by those with magic who are listening for his words.

    The old Green Man lost most of the valley he’d had governance over in a rock slide. Completely natural, and he’d been prepared to lie in fallowness for many decades, tending the little unblemished portion of his valley in quiet patience of an immortal spirit of nature.

    Then the ‘civilization’ attacked what little of his valley was left. They leveled good land for dwellings, laying stone over the ground so nothing could grow but they could travel easier, they caused the stream to move away from where the animals who’d survived needed it and water the plants they only allowed to grow in unnatural little lines. Stone and wood and fire were perverted for their ‘civilization.’ They never knew he was even there, he’d grown too weak from the initial land slide to be able to make himself known.

    Powerlessness plagued the Green Man. But the first civilization who had invaded his original valley was at least better than the valley he’d been loosed in now. Before he was gray and cragged from the land slide. Here, he’d turned black with pollution and dying things. It hurt to be here but he was somehow stronger here because there was less magic to oppose him here. He could avenge this valley and his own valley so much easier here. He would take the pain of the animals, the suffering of the plants, the wounds of the water and he would take it into himself. The more he did so the more he turned black but even this somehow made him stronger. It also made him enraged.

    I thought it would be something that would give Aethaden pause before destroying. A corrupted Green Man is very much something that would have many bones to pick with the civilization attacking the nature. I took from the idea of dryads and naiads as well as forest or nature gods sometimes called Green Man but made a power balance between the two. Not a full God, but more powerful than a spirit with governance over one tree or pond. Obviously he would be weak to destructive magic like fire, but they are in a rather wooded area that if he actually got close enough to strike at the Green Man, Ciaran would have a serious run for his money.

    Mostly because I’m imagining the Green Man to be able to have dominion over earth and plants primarily, but when natural water is nearby, he can use it as well. (EX: if the green man were by a swimming pool, he would ignore it as the water is too contaminated to do his bidding. Similarly, I see him having NO dominion over things like asphalt, concrete, plywood, and brick. Again, the cabin is in a largely untouched area so I’m thinking the Green Man would have opportunities to give us a grand impression of Toph from Avatar: The Last Air Bender(c) but also giving us a more natural Poison Ivy from Batman(c) where city boy Ciaran only sort of remembers that that plant is dangerous and should be avoided and says so to Aethaden when the branch suddenly grows out lightening fast and stabs into someone, directly injecting them with [insert dangerous plant from Earth here]. Now at least one someone is fighting poison while they are fighting for their lives and Aethaden takes a moment to recognize this pained twisted thing as what was once a Green Man and his heart HURTS.

    Alternately, Ciaran notices a beautiful plant growing at the forest edge after his Katas and brings in a few cuttings for a vase setting for their breakfast table. Aethaden wonders where Ciaran has gotten to because he was JUST outside doing his lovely Katas and suddenly there is a Rabid, corrupted Green Man and Aethaden must protect those in the house as well as try and get to Ciaran in time because he DEFINITELY recognizes that plant and he hadn’t thought it was native to earth and Ciaran doesn’t have much time. Somehow Aethaden must calm this Green Man without killing him because if the plant really ISN’T native to earth, only the Green Man can grow the plant that will save Ciaran.

    • Raythe May 15, 2018 at 3:40 pm #

      I really love the idea of corrupted nature as that would definitely speak to an Elf and the idea of accidentally bringing this thing in by doing a “good” thing. Brilliant backstory here!

      • Vera_lemur May 16, 2018 at 12:05 pm #

        Well Aethaden is so gloriously OP like his fellow Kings. (Alric, Aidan, Asher, Daemon, Valerius, and even Nate too because technically his other self is King of the demons) So I was really looking for something that would make him pause in the “light show” He can get up to so long as his energy is up. Right now Ciaran is still more balanced because even though he’s discovered his magic, he doesn’t know what to do with it. So he is a lot easier to challenge with something like a monster. Aethaden’s major challenges are mostly internal, so I thought of a monster to match that. I think I got the right balance of close quarters danger for Ciaran and moral dilemma for Aethaden to be nicely challenging to both.

  19. Vera_lemur May 15, 2018 at 3:36 am #

    My second idea is completely different. A Death Beckoner. Something between a Will o’ Whisp and Jack o’ the Lantern.

    A hard to see figure in the middle distance catches your eye. It beckons you. You’re confused. What does it want? Who is it? Where is it going?

    Questions feed it’s power and it latches onto them beckoning you onward with physical gesture. A swaying light catches and keeps your eyes, and half heard words that almost make sense and a magical pull on your curiosity to keep you going forward.

    Do they know where [thing you seek] is? Are they going to show you a secret, wonderful place? Can you live with your curiosity if you don’t follow and find out? When did this fog crop up? Who are they? Where are they going? Where are they going? Where are they going? What were you doing before you followed them? Where are they going? Where are they going? Where are they going? Who are they? For that matter, who are you? … Where are they going?

    Most beckoners are helpful spirits in isolated places that would guide lost travelers to what they sought, Death Beckoners are twisted by dark magic into using what one seeks to beguile that person until they follow that spirit, whom they swear they almost recognize, right to their death. Often without that person even aware of their fate until it’s far too late, if at all.

    Magic is only of use against them if employed in time to shield one’s mind. Better is pain to stop the natural flow of questions. Death Beckoners lose prey to bad stumbles in the woods, and so have learned to choose easy paths. Death beckoners are not physically powerful, and their abilities lie primarily in curiosity based beguilement, so long as a person is of still mind, magically protected, or too distracted to form questions in their head they can thwart this ability. The flip side is, that even a question like “are you alright?” can give the Death Beckoner a grip on your mind.

    Death beckoners are resistant to physical attack. They are incorporeal spirits, and so are susceptible to air magic in particular, with Water magic next in effectiveness, while earth magic is ignored and fire magic is rather less effective.

    • Raythe May 15, 2018 at 3:41 pm #

      I absolutely LOVE this! I can so see this happening.

      • Vera_lemur May 16, 2018 at 11:54 am #

        Thank you. I actually remembered a dumb horror movie about an American getting lost in the Japanese suicide woods and took off from there on how to make it less silly than the movie and base the attacking spirit on things we have lore of because if we have lore of elves, however in accurate, than maybe their creatures also feature in our mythology. So the lore we passed down talks of Jack of the lantern and will o’ whisps because different peoples had contact with an uncorrupted beckoner.

  20. Jih22 May 17, 2018 at 5:00 am #

    I like the idea of some sort of jaded Rivan whose bitter heart corrupts the soul and their magic. The magic becomes dark, insidious in that it has the ability to cloud the mind, corrupt those around them and their magic if they have it. Perhaps some necromancy to bring back those of their bloodline to make them serve their purpose. This may help explain why the Rivan who died had eyes similar to Ciaran. Maybe it was even his Mom that was being used in such a way but her strong heart and sense right with a need to protect tried to fight against, but the evil Rivan sensed they were losing hold of the Mom so released her back to death. A dangerous possible fate for Ciaran which his strong will will have to fight against. Of course his bond with King Aethedan will help to share that burden. The evil Rivan would be beautiful yet cold, with physician eyes, cloaked in shadows, claws and fangs. Strong light magic fortified with love can help sever the bonds between the evil Rivan and its puppets. So Ciaran and Aethedan better continue work on their relationship and bond.
    I find zombies, possession, mind control, soul stealing very scary so the fact this evil Rivan can do that is terrifying. Its dark beauty just makes it worse.
    …..so, something along those lines.

    • Raythe May 19, 2018 at 12:49 am #

      This actually may be sort of close to a “normal” Riven … Yeah, if they are one of the Mage Lords, they’re sort of like this. So nicely done!

  21. Dimunda May 18, 2018 at 3:42 am #

    Question: do the monsters have to be purely evil or are we looking for creatures too? Because I’ve dreamt of this creature of mine since high school and would love to see it come to life in your story! I even have commissioned pictures of it! (P.S. I never got to tell you this, but my dog is named after Asher!!)

    • Raythe May 19, 2018 at 12:50 am #

      They don’t have to be! They just have to something that would fit into the pantheon of the Elven Realm.

      OMG that is so cute about your dog! We need a pet pic!

      • Dimunda May 19, 2018 at 2:29 am #

        I can totally show you a picture of my dog!

        I think my creature could possibly fit in the elven realm! They sure are magical enough! They basically resemble an offspring between a fennec fox and a dear. They have two glowing orbs, one on each ear, and then one flowing from the tips of their tails. The orbs can glow a variety of color, but mainly come in blue. They used to follow me in my dreams and carry me to safety.

        I used to hear a weird little rhyme that went something like “Follow the light of the tail, it will lead you down the right trail. But follow the light of the ears and death soon will drw near.”

        I added on that the creatures aren’t necessarily evil, but more like omens. The light of the tail meant something good would happen, while the light of the ears meant something bad woud happen. Whichever glowed brightest signified an event’s turnout in the future!

        Like I said before, I have picture references of them! I think they’d fit nicely with the whole elf and magic scenario, but that’s of course the author’s call! 🙂

Powered by WordPress. Designed by WooThemes